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Faceless clones fill the halls
Thoughts filled with turmoil
Listening to grating voices and unneeded advice
Stop touching me
Go away
Artificial people
Injected with plastic
Faces plastered with rigor mortis grins
Eyes following me in the dark
Hands reaching out from the closet and underneath the bed
Monsters
             are
    EVERYWHERE
Really old poem I just found and edited.
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This poem is quite moving... Though the topic of angst and monsters has been thoroughly plumbed, you managed to put a spin on it by adding the idea of falseness. The word choice doesn't beat around the bush, surprising me at times. However, some of these same word choices made the poem seem a bit over-dramatic for my taste. It is a rather jerky poem, which is not necessarily a bad thing. One can really place themselves in the speaker's shoes. It really just makes me...think. About this world that we live in. How artificial it can be. Really excellent work, I hope to read more of your poems.
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Mistwolf4 Sep 11, 2013  Student Artist
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hetaliatardis Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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TheGalleryOfEve Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your beautiful work has been featured here: [link] :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz:
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hetaliatardis Mar 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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TheGalleryOfEve Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
My pleasure dear!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::aww::iconflyingheartsplz:
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hetaliatardis Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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LifeIsZealous Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great piece.
It is a little stilted, but that helps add to its atmosphere.
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hetaliatardis Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :iconhappytearsplz:
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Cyntilla Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm not a literature critic, but I liked it very much. It reminds me of a lot of sci-fi movies and the Asimov's books, something that a time traveler would think, a nightmare for someone from the past.
Sorry, I've been carried away, I hope this makes sense! :D
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hetaliatardis Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, you don't have to apologize. :D
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